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In the future all cars, buses and trucks will be driverless. The only people travelling inside these vehicles will be passengers. Do you think the advantages of driverless vehicles outweigh the disadvantages? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience

Future dwellers will rely on autonomous drive vehicles for all land commuting and travel. I believe
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 development that supports shifting from being engaged with driving to other beneficial activities has vast advantages
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 indeed outweigh its negative side effects. Driving in crowded streets and being stuck in a traffic jam is an unavoidable part of commuting in cities , which results in a bunch of irritating problems. As the first and most important advantage of omitting driving by driverless means, supporting individuals' health can be mentioned. Driving in traffic jams is associated with reacting to unpredictable and
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 situations that trigger stress hormones like cortisol and adrenaline, raising heart rate and tension. As evidence, A UK study found that commuters with long driving periods reported higher stress and lower productivity than those with shorter or no commutes. Turning to the second positive
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 of omitting driving in modern cities, saving
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 can be mentioned.
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 more than three hours of Tehran dwellers' daily
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 are wasted by being engaged with driving for commuting, they can invest
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 invaluable
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 in doing other activities for their professions or learning something new about their occupations.
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 is a
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 investment since we talk about more than 6 million workforces in Tehran and around 18 million hours per day. In conclusion, a futuristic point of view in regard to commuting with driverless means should be interpreted as a brilliant development which supports dwellers'
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 and productivity and
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 brings surprisingly high-yielding work
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 to the business tables.

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Balance your view. The task asks if the good points beat the bad. You mainly give good points. Add more about the bad sides and say how the good ones win.
structure
Make the flow clear. Use simple steps like First, Next, Then, Finally to link ideas and move from one point to the next.
accuracy
Be careful with facts. Some numbers or claims may look wrong or unclear. Try to use real and simple facts or say 'studies show' without a wrong figure.
grammar
Keep sentences short. Some lines are long. Shorter lines help the reader.
content
The essay shows a clear view; you take a side and back it with reasons.
structure
There is an introduction and a conclusion, so the essay has a goal and end.
evidence
You use some evidence to back points, such as a UK study.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • driverless vehicles
  • advantages
  • disadvantages
  • increased safety
  • reduced traffic congestion
  • improved efficiency
  • accessibility
  • disabled
  • elderly
  • job displacement
  • privacy concerns
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