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Band 0.5

Some people think that environmental problems should be solved on global scale while other believes it is better to deal with national level. Discuss both the views and state your opinion.

In today's world
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, preserving
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 old buildings is a widely debated topic. Some people believe that preserving them is essential for maintaining a connection to the past,
while
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 others argue that modern development should take priority over maintaining old structures. Both perspectives have valid points, and
this
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 essay will discuss both views before presenting a personal opinion.

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structure
Add two or three body paragraphs with main points for each view and a clear own opinion.
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Finish with a short conclusion that restates your view and sums up the main ideas.
language
Use simple words to link ideas, like and, but, also, first, next, then.
content
Give real examples or facts to back up each idea.
accuracy
Check grammar and cut long sentences to keep the piece easy to read.
strength
Plan to talk about both sides is clear.
structure
Intro shows the task and plan.
coherence
There are linking words that show contrast.
Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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