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Is forcing students to study hard is a good idea? Do you agree or disagree with this idea?

The hypothesis was supported by figures that chart the sequence of
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the β2AR–Gs
 complex. In
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 2, the sequential nature of
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the β2AR–Gs
 complex is evident. Particles from
earliest
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 time point (5s) constitute the
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 components of the initial intermediates (open AHD). Over time, contributions from later points (10s and 17s) increasingly dominate,
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 to the closed AHD state.
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 3 makes clear that AHD closure alone does not cause major changes within the RHD.
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, the presence of nucleotide is required to drive the extension of the α1 helix.
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 4, in turn, supports the idea of functional dissociation.
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 5 brings the findings together, laying out how each structure shift plays out in sequence as GTP primes the G protein for action.

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This text shows a clear chain of steps and uses figures to back each point.
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Add a brief opening line to state the aim and a closing line to sum the findings.
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Use more linking words to show how one step leads to the next.
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Keep some sentences short and simple so the idea is easy to follow.
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Clear steps and order are easy to see.
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Figures are used well to back points.
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Short, direct sentences keep the flow.
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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