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Nowadays many students choose to take a year off before going to university. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of taking a gap year, and give your own opinion about whether it is a good idea.

Nowdays
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Nowadays
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, plenty of learners continue
studies
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their studies
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 after completing school or
college
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college,
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while
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 other kids choose to take a
gao
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gap
year
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 before starting
study
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their studies
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. In
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essey
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essay
 I will discuss both sides before the conclusion .
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, a gap
year
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 helps
students
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 learn new things outside of the traditional classroom.
Traveling
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 can help them see new cultures and meet different people.
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 experience can make them more open-minded, confident, and independent.
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, visiting foreign countries teaches
students
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 how to adapt to new situations and solve problems on their own.
Secondly
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, working during
this
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time
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 gives
students
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 practical experience. It teaches responsibility
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time
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 management
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 skills that are useful in
future
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a future
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 job or studies.
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 experience can
also
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 help
students
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 decide what career path they want to follow.
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, some people think that a gap
year
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 can be a waste of
time
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. They worry that
students
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 might forget what they learned in school or lose their motivation to study.
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Also
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 some
students
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 may not use their
time
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 well and only relax without learning or gaining anything new.
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 can delay their education and future plans. In conclusion, I believe a gap
year
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 can be very beneficial if
students
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 plan it properly and use the
time
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 to learn or work.
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, it might be a waste of
time
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 and cause unnecessary delays.

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content
For task response, give a clear view and add more full detail for each point. Try to have one main idea per paragraph and back it with a specific example.
organization
For coherence, use linking words to guide the reader and make transitions smooth. Try to connect sentences in each paragraph.
examples
Add 1-2 real examples about how a gap year helps or can delay study, and explain why.
language
Check spelling and grammar, and keep the language simple and clear.
structure
Make the conclusion strong by restating your view clearly and summarizing main ideas.
content
The essay shows both sides and puts the writer's view in the final line.
structure
There are clear sign posts: Firstly, Secondly, However, In conclusion.
content
The idea of travel and work as parts of a gap year is well shown.
Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

Examples make your writing easier to understand by illustrating points more effectively.

Examples, if used properly, not only help you get higher marks for ‘Task Response’ but also for ‘Coherence’.

When giving examples it is best to put them after your main idea or topic sentence. They can be used in the middle of supporting sentences or they can be used to start a new sentence. There is no rule for where exactly to give examples in essays, logically they would come after your main idea/topic sentence or just after a supporting sentence.

Linking words for giving examples:

  • for example
  • for instance
  • to illustrate this
  • to give a clear example
  • such as
  • namely
  • to illustrate
  • take, for example

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