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Nowadays, many people work from home. Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?

After the pandemic, the global
popuation
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population
 was drastically affected, both socially
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as well as
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 economically. One of the main changes introduced into the world includes remote working.
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this
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 may have existed before COVID-19, its contagiousness meant there was a need for quarantine, and
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, society had to learn to
work
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 from
home
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. In
this
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 essay, we explore the benefits and disadvantages of working from
home
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. It is crucial to consider the convenience of working from
home
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. One would no longer need the
time
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 to commute from their homes to their place of
work
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, which means that
time
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 is saved
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 and can be used for other concerns. As an example, an employee of a marketing company in Hong Kong would need thirty minutes to travel from their apartment to their office. Their working hours are 9:00a.m. - 6:00p.m. It is commonly known that the working population of Hong Kong,
especialy
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especially
 those with white collar jobs, are prone to working
over
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time
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. From
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this
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 we can infer that not only would they arrive
home
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 at a later hour, but
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 that they may continue with the rest of their routine later! Most importantly, they would sleep later, which can lead to physical and mental health issues, including but not limited to fatigue or stress, possibly affecting their
work
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. If working at a physical office with other employees means a longer commuting
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, it
also
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 equals
low
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 efficiency in
time
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, which could mean the quality of their
work
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being
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 lower.
Therefore
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, it is beneficial to have employees
work
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 from
home
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, since it saves
time
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 for travel, which can be used for employees' own interests and
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health
, or even for putting more
time
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 into
work
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.
On the other hand
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, remote working allows for a variety of distractions. Working from
home
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 means there are a lot of different factors in your
home
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 that may divert your attention.
For instance
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, a father of three young
children
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 may have to
work
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 from
home
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 on a Saturday, and all of these
children
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 do not have to attend school. Their mother is
also
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 at
work
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.
While
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 the
children
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 need
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 care of, the father has to simultaneously balance his tasks at
work
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.
This
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 highly requires
time
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 management, as he may choose to complete his tasks early in order to be able to give his full attention to his
children
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, participating in their fun and health.
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, working from
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 relies on
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, rather than supervision by management. Even though there are additional possible distractions, remote
work
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 means that a supervisor or manager cannot observe directly exactly what an employee is doing at the moment, and so is not able to know which task they are performing. As an illustration, an employee may be halfway through a task,
then
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finding
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 it boring, and decide to pursue an interest,
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 as gaming.
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, working from
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 may open windows to more
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temptations. In conclusion, the advantages do not outweigh the disadvantages of working from
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. Working from
home
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 may be more convenient and raise
quality
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 of
work
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, but it comes with multiple challenges, and may need higher discipline in the workplace. One must consider both sides of an argument before coming to a
judgement
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.
However
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, it is of utmost importance to be able to put these ideas into context. When deciding whether remote working is the correct decision for you
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 or your company, you must evaluate whether it will be suitable
according to
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 the norms of your practice.

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task
Make your view clear in the first paragraph and restate it in the last paragraph.
task
Add a simple plan at the start and keep to it in the body.
task
Give one strong example for each main point.
coherence
Use short link words (and, but, also) to connect ideas so the flow is easy.
grammar
Check spelling and grammar for small mistakes (especialy, healt).
structure
Keep one main idea in each paragraph to stay tidy.
lexical
Use plain words, not long or hard terms.
content
The essay shows a clear view on the topic.
content
There are real examples used (Hong Kong travel time, a father with kids).
structure
The writing is easy to read and the paragraphs are clear.
content
Reasoning is logical in places.
Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 250 words in writing task 2. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long essay will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.

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