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Band 4

Language teachers should concentrate on giving positive feedback to students when they do good work, rather than on critising bad work.

The linguist teacher should focus on giving positive
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great
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, more than criticising bad
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. It is a good thing that
teachers
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 give positive
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instead
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 of
criticing
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criticising
 bad
work
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.
However
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,I think that
teachers
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 must give
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positive
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 and include criticising in it. For
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 I
partally
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partially
 agree with the proposition.   Some people might agree with the proposition because criticising bad
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 might give somebody a bad thought about himself, after
that
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 he might not
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 hard because of the bad thought he made about himself
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 he will not try to develop his skills. Another reason some people think that if you
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positive
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 you will do whatever the teacher asks you to do.  
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 there is a minor number of people
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 disagree with the proposition for the reason that positive
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 will not show you your weaknesses and how to improve them
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 some
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positive
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 because he does not want to think for every student how to improve himself.  
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,
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me
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I think
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balanced
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 is the best way for the student to
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improved
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. The student
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constructive
criticing
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criticism
 to know how he will develop himself.
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, he needs
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positive
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 that will mention his streangeth points.  
To sum up
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, I partly agree that the linguist
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 should give students positive
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. But the
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also
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 include in the
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 a constructive criticising.

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structure
State a clear view in the intro and keep it in the end.
coherence
Put one main idea in each paragraph and link with simple connect words like and, but, also.
grammar
Fix spelling and grammar. Correct words like criticising, streangeth, linguist, critising, and use standard spellings.
content
Give one or two easy example to back each point.
content
The essay tries to talk about both sides of the idea.
structure
There are clear paragraphs and a closing line.

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • concentrate on
  • positive feedback
  • good work
  • criticising
  • bad work
  • motivate
  • boost confidence
  • discourage
  • demotivate
  • identify strengths
  • build on
  • overwhelming
  • hinder
  • progress
  • balance
  • effective teaching
  • encourage
  • take risks
  • think creatively
  • fear of failure
  • hesitation
  • positive learning environment
  • demoralize
  • negative atmosphere
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