ome people think that visiting museums is the best way for children to learn history, while many others think there are several better ways. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Nowadays, some people argue that visiting museums
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is more
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beneficial for children in order to learn about history,
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others believe there are other resources. In my view,
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online platforms and libraries
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are helpful
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in
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regard, I strongly believe visiting
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a museum
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can help kids in a much better way.
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essay will discuss both
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opinions
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. On the one hand, museums play a vital role
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in understanding
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the culture. To illustrate,
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a museum
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allows pupils to see the past and touch some items.
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a result, it
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enhances
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their critical thinking skills and memory.
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, it is an interesting way to encourage them to explore more about their culture and be
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person.
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, parents should visit the
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with their children to
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learn
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how
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important it
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is an important place.
On the other hand
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, it is true that there are
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ways to learn about traditional culture,
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as reading books and social media. Reading
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imagination
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they are reading
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, and
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some of them
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curios
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to search more and more about the past.
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, watching short movies
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social media
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makes
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it easy to get the idea for them. Despite that, I feel it is boring for some children to only read or see pictures
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a screen
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. In conclusion,
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reading and using technology can support students to gain knowledge about history, I firmly agree
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that the
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benefits from visiting museums outweigh other ways.
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, we should
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the museum
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in order to understand
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the grandparents’
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generation.

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planning
Plan your essay first. Write a short plan with 3 main ideas.
structure
Each paragraph should have one main idea. Use a clear topic sentence.
cohesion
Use linking words to show how ideas go with each other.
content
Give real examples, dates or facts when you can.
grammar
Check grammar and use correct verb and article forms.
conclusion
End with a strong view in the last part.
presentation
The essay shows the ask and has a view at the end.
content
There are ideas on why museums can help learning.
balance
It mentions more than one way to learn.

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