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The chart below shows shares of expenditures for five major categories in five countries

The chart below shows shares of expenditures for five major categories in five countries
The chart illustrates the percentage of household spending in the United States, Canada, the United Kingdom and Japan on five different categories in 2009. These include food, housing, transportation, health care, and clothing.
Overall
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, housing took up the largest share of expenditure in all four countries,
while
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 health care accounted for the lowest proportion. Spending on food and transportation
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 showed some notable variations between nations. In terms of housing, the figure was highest in the United States at about 26%, followed by the United Kingdom with around 23%. Canada and Japan both spent a slightly lower proportion, at about 22%. Meanwhile, health care made up only a small part of expenses everywhere, ranging from around 3% in Canada and the UK to roughly 7% in the US.

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