People believe that in order to reduce road accidents it should be mandatory for drivers to retake the driving test every three years. Do you agree or disagree with the above statement?

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become a major concern for the whole world today.
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some argue that it is crucial to take the driving
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every three
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, personally I strongly believe that
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due to
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. Those who advocate that sitting on
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test should be mandatory cite that
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and qualified drivers would possibly reduce the
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accidents
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considerably. To say that they feel that in order
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the driving
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the drivers tend to try their best to remember the rules,
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they
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drive safely
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the
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rules.
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,
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accidents
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foremost reason why I believe that
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test would not be
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for
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accidents
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is the corruption that we are
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today. The examples can be seen in less-affluent and
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and people need to illegally gain the driving license, as
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it hard to receive
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license
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a fair examination.
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it useless to make the mandatory driving test to prevent
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accidents
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, I maintain the idea that it is the
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network that we pay attention to increase
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safety. To say that, government agencies should introduce new
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rules and invest in
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the infrastructure
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of roads, which
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prevent
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accidents
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significantly.
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, the main attention should
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central areas and highways where traffic congestion can cause serious
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accidents
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,
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measure can be effective
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happening. In conclusion,
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critics argue that
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testing system would reduce the
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accidents
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, I firmly believe that we should consider other factors like corruption and poorly designed infrastructure
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, which
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make
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system ineffective. If governments had invested in
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infrastructure,
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we could have reduced
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accidents
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task response
State your view clearly in the first paragraph. Stay on task and give two main reasons with one or two simple examples. End with a short conclusion that repeats your view.
coherence cohesion
In each paragraph, use a clear topic sentence. Link ideas with easy words like and, but, also, for example. Keep a simple order: problem, reason, fix, effect. Check mainly tense and spelling.
stance
You set a clear view on the topic.
content
You give real points like corruption and road work as ways to cut accidents.

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    • Sentence 2 - Example
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