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The pie charts below show how dangerous waste products are dealt with in three countries. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The pie charts below show how dangerous waste products are dealt with in three countries. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar chart represents information on toxic
waste
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 tackle from South Korea,
Sweden
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 and the United
Kingdom
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.
Overall
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, the throw out
litters
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litter
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 underground was the highest item
than
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among
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 other methods,
while
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 the burning
waste
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 was the lowest for all. The United
Kingdom
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using
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, using
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 underground to deal with
rubbish
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rubbish,
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 accounted for about 82%, which was 1.5
times
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 more than
Sweden
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 and
making
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accounted for
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 four-fifths of all approaches.
Whereas
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, South Korea
address
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addresses
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 environmental
wastes
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waste
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utilize
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by utilising
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recycle
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recycling
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, which constituted
for
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apply
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69% and was 7.5
times
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 more than that of burning
waste
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.
By contrast
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, South
Korea
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Korea's
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 underground and
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Sweden
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Sweden's
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 fire wastes showed almost the same figure of 22% and 20%, respectively, which was higher
the
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than the
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 chemical treatment by approximately 12%.
Sweden
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 solves the
waste
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 products
the
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, the
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 second one was recycling, which occupied 25% and was 12
times
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 more than the United
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Kingdom
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Kingdom's
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 usage of incineration.
Similarly
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, dumping at
the
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apply
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sea and chemical treatment reached the same consumption of 8% in the United
Kingdom
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. Notably, incineration
was made up
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accounted
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 for 2% in the United
Kingdom
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, which
was making
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made
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 a 4 to 41
times
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 difference compared to other means.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words waste, sweden, kingdom, times with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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