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This graph shows the proportion of four different materials that were recycled from 1982 to 2010 in a particular country.

This graph shows the proportion of four different materials that were recycled from 1982 to 2010 in a particular country.
The given line graph depicts the rate of reusing, directed to four
stuffs
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 between 1982 and 2010
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,it is evident from
graph
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the graph
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 that two materials
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such
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, such
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 as Paper-cardboard and Glass
containers
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containers,
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estabilished
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established
theirself
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themselves
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 as the dominant cohorts in reprocessing
thoughout
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throughout
 the period.
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,
Alumininium
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Aluminium
 cans experienced a considerable surge only by the middle of
period
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whereas
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, whereas
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 plastics found in the downward trend over the given period. In
details
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,Paper-cardboard’s pattern reached about 65% on recycling in 1982.
This
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 figure climbed more sharply to 80% in 1994,representing the highest point among
remained
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 other supplies.Glass containers followed a similar upward trajectory,starting with 50% by 1982,despite
minor
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a minor
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 decline stuff preserved
own
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its own
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 stability with 60% by 2010.
Meanwhile
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Alumininium
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aluminium
 cans
beginning
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began
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 at the lowest mark in 1982.By 2002,
tendency
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the tendency
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 was reversed and underwent a profound transformation with approximately 45%. Plastics exhibited no significant activity until the whole almost three decades,starting at about 4% by 1982,finishing at almost 9% in 2010.

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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • proportion
  • recycled
  • materials
  • percentage
  • paper and cardboard
  • glass
  • plastic
  • metal
  • stable
  • noticeable
  • rise
  • significant increase
  • accounting for
  • consistent
  • ste steadily
  • dramatically
  • nearly
  • worth noting
  • relatively low
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