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The charts below show the differences in how people in 3 countries learned English in 2010 and 2015.

The charts below show the differences in how people in 3 countries learned English in 2010 and 2015.
A glance at the pie charts
illustrate
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 the differences between three countries
of
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in
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 how people are learning English in 2010 and 2015. On the whole,
It
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it
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 is apparent that
COUNTRY
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C
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 represented the highest proportion,
while
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COUNTRY
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 A secured the top position of learning abroad in 2010.
However
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,
COUNTRY
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C
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remained
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had
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 the highest quantity of evening
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class
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classes
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 in 2015.
Likewise
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,
COUNTRY
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 A maintained the largest proportion of learning abroad.
According to
Linking Words
 2010, the top position belongs to
COUNTRY
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C
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 with nearly 95%,
while
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 it is
COUNTRY
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 A that stands at the highest ranking, with 70% of the evening
class
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. Meanwhile,
COUNTRY
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 B represented the highest figure in online
class
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, with 8%.
However
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,
COUNTRY
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C
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 experienced the lowest amount of studying abroad, which is 0%. Moving to 2015, it is noticeable that
COUNTRY
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C
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 maintained the largest proportion of evening
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class
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,
while
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COUNTRY
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 B remained unchanged between 2010 and 2015. It is noticeable that
COUNTRY
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 A accounted for 10%, doubling that for online
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class
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classes
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 in 2010.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however, while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words country, c, class with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "differences" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "represented" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
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