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The table below shows the expenses of a used bookstore in Scotland for the first and last month of the same year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table below shows the expenses of a used bookstore in Scotland for the first and last month of the same year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The presented table provides information on the
expenses
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 of a used bookstore in the year 2018, in
January
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 and
December
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in
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, in
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 Scotland.
Overall
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, in
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December
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december
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december,
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 used bookstore had paid far more
charges
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as
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apply
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compared to
the
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apply
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january
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January
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 in the given year. Amount spent on rent, professional fees,
maintenace
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maintenance
 and
on
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other
expenses
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 was higher in
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last
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the last
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 given month;
however
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, wages & benefits, utilities
and
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, and
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 equipment
charges
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 were at
highest
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the highest
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 level in
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january
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January
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the
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, the
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 same period. A detailed analysis reveals that
amount
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the amount
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 utilised on wages & benefits and utilities was lowest in
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december
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December
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, other than
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january
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January
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, exactly $226 and $265, respectively.
In contrast
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, rent
charges
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,
preofessional
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professional
 fees, and other
expenses
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 had
showed
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shown
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highest
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the highest
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 share in
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december
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December
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, exactly $4909, $132, and $599, respectively
in
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, in
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 2018. Regarding remainings, in 2018, there was a negligible difference in the amount of money spent on equipment $260 in
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january
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January
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, and $226 in the
last
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 month. Maintenance
charges
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 were around three times higher in the final given month and reached
at
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apply
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$42.
Similarly
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, marketing
expenses
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 were
also
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 increased slightly and reached
at
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apply
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$355 in
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december
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December
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.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "last".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words expenses, january, december, charges with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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