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Band 4

Many people like to eat unhealthy food even though they know it’s bad for themselves. Why? What effective ways can improve people's healthy eating habits?

Over the past few years, the issue of unhealthy
food
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 has been widely debated.It is argued that unhealthy
food
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 should be reduced
to
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 eat
,
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 I firmly believe that
people
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 should value
this
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 challenge and start to solve
this
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 problem.I will explain the reasons and provide the solution in the following paragraphs. One of the main
reason
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reasons
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 is that unhealthy
type
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types
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food
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of food
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usually
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are usually
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is
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apply
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cheap and fast to eat.
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,
people
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acknowlenge
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acknowledge
 that fast
food
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 is harmful for our physical
,
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health, while
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while
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 the public remains
the
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in the
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 habit of consuming junk
food
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.Many
people
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 spend a lot of time
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working
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 and
study
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studying
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,
therefore
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 they don't have enough time to eat
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apply
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food
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.In recent research, pointing out
more
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that more
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 than 65% of
people
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 decide to eat fast
food
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 during their work time, whether students or employees.
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, many fast
food
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 restaurants
is
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are
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location
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 near the office buildings and schools.In order to
providing
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provide
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suffient
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sufficient
food
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 to them. Admittedly, there is no doubt that junk
food
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 is bad for our
body
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bodies
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.To deal with
this
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 problem, the government should take
an
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apply
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action.Provided
autherities
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authorities
 don't offer some subsidies to the
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food's
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food
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 market and restaurants, it is effective to solve the root problem.The government should take advantage of
legal
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the law
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 to reduce the original
food
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 resource price.Not only
the
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should health
restaurant's
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restaurants
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 dish decline the cost, but
also
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the
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supermarkets could introduce some
food
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set
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sets
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.
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,many
people
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are
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apply
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feel confused
about
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apply
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because they live alone.As a
conquence
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consequence
, cooking
food
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 is a difficult task
,
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;
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 it is difficult
that
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to finish
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food
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is finished
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apply
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rapidly.To address
this
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 challenge, markets can provide the fresh
food
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 set.As a
conquence
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consequence
, individuals can buy the
quanity
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quantity
 of only one person.
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,
goverments
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governments
 should offer some funding
on
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for
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 the original
food
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.For the purpose of attracting the motivation of the public
buy
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to buy
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 the health
food
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. In conclusion,
while
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 there are several
pinions
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opinions
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 on
this
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 issue, I remain optimistic that its
influene
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influence
 will be more positive in the future.Meanwhile, there will
have
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be
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more
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a more
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 efficient approach to implement.

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structure
Make a clear plan. In intro say the main idea and the plan of your essay. Then use two or three body parts to talk about causes and fixes.
structure
Keep one idea per paragraph. Start with a clear topic sentence for each paragraph.
coherence
Use linking words to show order and reason (first, next, because, so).
grammar
Fix grammar and spelling. Use short and simple sentences to avoid errors.
content
Give real facts or examples to back up ideas. Use numbers if you can.
content
The topic is seen and some plan to fix the issue is given.
coherence
There is some link between ideas.
content
A plan to act is mentioned in the text.

Your opinion

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