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The system used for rubbish collection in your local area is not working properly. This is causing problems for you and your neighbours. Write a letter to the local council. In your letter describe how the rubbish collection system is not working properly explain how this is affecting you and your neighbours suggest what should be done about the problem

Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing
this
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 letter to complain about the issues
of
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 the
rubbish
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 collection system in
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 community. Normally, our
rubbish
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 is scheduled to be collected every Monday morning.
However
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, since the beginning of
this
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 month, the collection has
delayed
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 twice. Added to that, there was no one to come to collect our
rubbish
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 in the second week of
this
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 month. I find
this
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 entirely unacceptable. The aforementioned problems have caused significant negative effects on the normal lives of the local people. First of all, we have had to purchase a new
rubbish
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 bin to store our
rubbish
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due to
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missing
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 collection, which wasted our money.
In addition
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, some kitchen waste has started getting smelly, which
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leads to a bad environment in our houses. I consider
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 are some measures
should
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that should
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 be conducted to deal with
this
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 serious issue. First of all, the managers of
city
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 council should check whether your staff come to every community to collect
rubbish
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 following the predetermined schedules.
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, if your employees miss the
schedule
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 time, there should be a plan to make up. If you need more information, please contact me without hesitation. Yours faithfully, Lily Law

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task
Add more detail. Say how long this has happened and what you want the council to do and by when.
structure
Put one idea in each paragraph. Start with the problem, then how it hurts you, then what to do.
greeting
Use a clear opening and closing. Keep a polite tone.
tone
Keep a calm, polite and formal tone.
content
You list the issues clearly.
tone
The tone is formal.
purpose
You ask for action from the council.
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