IELTS Writing Correction Service
Writing Samples
Band 8

The system used for rubbish collection in your local area is not working properly. This is causing problems for you and your neighbours. Write a letter to the local council. In your letter describe how the rubbish collection system is not working properly explain how this is affecting you and your neighbours suggest what should be done about the problem

Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing
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 letter to complain about the issues with the rubbish collection system in the ABC community. Normally, our rubbish is scheduled to be collected every Monday morning.
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, since the beginning of
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 month, the collection has been delayed twice. Added to that, there was no one to come to collect our waste in the second week of
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 month. I find
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 entirely unacceptable. The aforementioned problems have caused significant negative effects on the normal lives of the local people. First of all, we have had to purchase a new bin to store our waste
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 the missed collection, which wasted our money.
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, some kitchen waste has started getting smelly, which leads to an extremely bad environment in our houses. I consider that some measures should be taken to deal with
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 serious issue. First of all, the managers of the city council should check whether your staff come to every community to collect rubbish following the predetermined schedules.
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, if your employees miss the scheduled time, there should be a plan to make up. If you need more information, please contact me without hesitation. Yours faithfully, Lily Law

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content
The letter covers the main points, but some ideas can be clearer. Add dates and exact times to show when the missed pickups happened.
structure
Divide the text into smaller chunks. A separate paragraph should cover each big point (problem, impact, fix).
language
Keep sentences short and simple. Some sentences are long and hard to read.
tone
Keep a formal tone all through the letter. A few phrases could be more direct.
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End with a clear request, such as 'Please fix this by [date]' and offer a way to contact you.
structure
Clear opening and closing that fit a formal letter.
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Explains how the issue affects neighbours and makes a case for action.
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Gives practical steps the council can take.
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