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The graph shows the number of visitors to four international museums between 1980 and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph shows the number of visitors to four international museums between 1980 and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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overall
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,
The
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the
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 graph shows lines representing the
number
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 of visitors in 4
world wide
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worldwide
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museums
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, in the
peroid
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period
 from 1980 to 2015.
Generally
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Generally,
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 there have been
alot
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a lot
 of
change
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changes
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 in the
number
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 of people attending
museums
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.
For instance
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, over the
years
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years,
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 the
number
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 of men and women attending the
Louvre
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 and Vatican
musems
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museums
have
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has
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 increased
heavlly
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heavily
,
while
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 the rest
museums
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suffers
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suffer
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 a decrease in the
number
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 of
popilation
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visitors
. The
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louvre
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Louvre
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 started
1980
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in 1980
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 with
approximetlly
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approximately
 7.9
million
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visits
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ranking
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, ranking
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him
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it
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 the most visited museum in the graph. which he maintained, with a gradual increase to
roughfully
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roughly
 8.9
million
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visits
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.
same
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Same
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 case with the
vatican
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Vatican Museums
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museums
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, they started off at 4.3
million
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visits
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 in 1980
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, experincing
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experincing
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experiencing
 a steady increase to almost catching
with
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up with
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 the
Louvre
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 at 8.6
million
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, ranking them the second most visited
musuems
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museums
 in 2015.
While
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 there have been
a
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apply
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huge increases in the
Louvre
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 and
vatican
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Vatican
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Museums
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, the opposite
happend
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happened
 to the London
since
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apply
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and Shenzhen
Museums
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.
the both
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Both
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 went through the same path
starting
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, starting
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 at just under 4
million
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visits
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 in 1980 to 3
million
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 in 2000.
at
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At
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 that
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period
peroid
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peroid,
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 they had a crosspath where
shenzhen museum
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Shenzhen Museum
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to
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apply
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a
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apply
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rise
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rose
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 to
same
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the same
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 point of 4
million
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at
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in
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 2015,
while
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london
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London
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Scince
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Science
 had a steady decline to just over 2
million
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 in 2015

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, museums, louvre, million, visits with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 4 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • visitor numbers
  • trend analysis
  • stability
  • popularity
  • significant changes
  • peak periods
  • low points
  • global tourism trends
  • economic downturns
  • natural disasters
  • tourist patterns
  • dynamic nature
  • factors influencing
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