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The graph shows the number of visitors to four international museums between 1980 and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph shows the number of visitors to four international museums between 1980 and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The graph illustrates the
amount
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number
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 of
visitors
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 to international museums, which
is
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include
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the louvre
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louvre
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Louvre
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,
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London
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the London
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science
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Science Museum
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museum
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,
Vatican
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the Vatican
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museums
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Museums
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, and
Shenzhen
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the Shenzhen
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museum
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Museum
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. from 1980 to 2015. Measure unit by
millions
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. Overview, louvre was the highest most of the time with
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a significan
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significan
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significant
 number
but
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, but
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 in recent
years
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vatican museums
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Vatican Museums
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has
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have
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 been
compatitive
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competitive
,
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however
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however,
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 it is the second.
While
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London
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the London
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science
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Science Museum
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museum
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 used to be
third
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third,
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 it had
fall
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fallen
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 and
becom
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become
last
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,
then
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the shenzhen
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shenzhen
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Shenzhen Museum
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museum
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which
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, which
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become
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became
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 the third of the number of
visitors
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.
To begin
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 with,
louvre
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apply
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in
1990
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1990,
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 the number of
visitors
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 were 8
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millions
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million
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, and had
rose
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risen
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 in the next
years
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 and reached
it
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its
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 peak in 1995
which
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, which
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also
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was also
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 the
highst
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highest
 point by around 9
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millions
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million
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, before it had
slight
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slightly
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 declined in
few
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a few
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years
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 and
end
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ended
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 in 2015
by
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with
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 less than 10
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millions
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million
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. Next
vatican
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Vatican Museum
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museum
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which
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, which
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it
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apply
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start
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started
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by
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with
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 5
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millions
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million
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 in 1980,
then
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 it had
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a rappid
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rappid
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rapid
 increase throughout the
years
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 and
be
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became
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 second with
small
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a small
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different
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difference
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by
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of
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 less than 10
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millions
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million
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 in 2015. After that,
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London
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the London
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science
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Science Museum
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museum
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,
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apply
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it
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apply
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start
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started
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 in 1980 with 4
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millions
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million
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visitior
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visitors
 exactly, and stayed the same in the next five
years
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 before it had
sharp
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a sharp
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 decrease and
be
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was
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last
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one
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apply
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in 2005
by
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with
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 around 3
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millions
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million
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, after that it
end
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ended
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 in 2015
just
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with just
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 over 2
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millions
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million
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.
Finally
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,
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the shenzhen
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shenzhen
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Shenzhen Museum
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museum
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which
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, which
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 was
last
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 in 1980
by
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with
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less
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fewer
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 than 4
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millions
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million visitors
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,
then
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 it
had
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apply
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tied with
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London
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the London
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science
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Science Museum
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museum
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 in 1990 until 2000
by
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with
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 around 3
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millions
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million visitors
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, after that it
become
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became
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 the third in 2005 with over 3
millions
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 and finished in 2015 with
less
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fewer
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 than 4
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millions
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million
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visitors
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.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "last".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words visitors, london, science, museum, millions, years with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • visitor numbers
  • trend analysis
  • stability
  • popularity
  • significant changes
  • peak periods
  • low points
  • global tourism trends
  • economic downturns
  • natural disasters
  • tourist patterns
  • dynamic nature
  • factors influencing
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