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The map shows the present layout of an post building and plans for its future redevelopment.

The map shows the present layout of an post building and plans for its future redevelopment.
The map illustrates the present and the future design of an
office
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 building.
Overall
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, the present post
office
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 has 10 rooms
,
Punctuation problem
;
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however
Linking Words
,
Correct article usage
the
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office
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 building
planned
Verb problem
is planned
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 to have 6 rooms in the future periods.
In
Change preposition
On
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 the East and
West
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side
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sides
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 of the
building
Add a comma
building,
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 there are huge
grass
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Use synonyms
area
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areas
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, and there is an entrance in the south of the building. There are
also
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 two entrances
one
Punctuation problem
, one
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 of them
situates
Wrong verb form
situated
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 in
south
Correct article usage
the south
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, and the other one is in the
west
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 beside the
grass
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area
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.
Present
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The present
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 building has four small
office
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 rooms . From walking through the
west
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 entrance, there is a kitchen on the left and next to
it
Punctuation problem
it,
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 there is a canteen where employees can eat their meals. In the north east side of the
building
Add a comma
building,
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 there is
an
Correct article usage
a
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 Storeroom and WCs
locates
Wrong verb form
located
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 below it.
However
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, in the future,
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west
Correct article usage
the west
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 entrance will be unchanged
,
Punctuation problem
;
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however
Linking Words
,
south
Correct article usage
the south
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etrance
Correct your spelling
entrance
 will be relocated between 2 large offices.
Kitchen
Correct article usage
The kitchen
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 and canteen will be demolished and replaced with 2 small offices.
Storeroom
Correct article usage
The storeroom
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 will remain in the same direction.
Grass
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 areas will be completely changed.
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Grass
Correct article usage
The grass
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area
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 in the
west
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 will be turned into
outdoor
Correct article usage
an outdoor
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 seating
area
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, and the
north east
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northeast
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 part of the
grass
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area
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 will be used as
meeting
Correct article usage
a meeting
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area
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and
Punctuation problem
, and
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 the other side will have
coffee
Correct article usage
a coffee
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 machine and WCs.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words office, west, grass, area with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "present" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • map
  • present
  • future
  • plan
  • building
  • post office
  • area
  • space
  • room
  • entrance
  • exit
  • door
  • window
  • car park
  • parking
  • yard
  • road
  • path
  • sign
  • counter
  • desk
  • staff
  • customer
  • service
  • work
  • time
  • crowd
  • line
  • bigger
  • new
  • old
  • safe
  • easy
  • clear
  • open
  • bright
  • design
  • build
  • change
  • improve
  • add
  • extend
  • phase
  • cost
  • traffic
  • noise
  • safety
  • access
  • people
  • move
  • area
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