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Band 3.5

Nowadays, it seems that people tend to waste a great amount of food. Why do you think this is happening? And how can we solve this problem?

In the contemporary epoch, people are likely to
waste
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 a considerable amount of
food
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.
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This
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 essay, I will illustrate the cause and the solution of
this
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problem
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. The major reason
of
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for
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this
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problem
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 is the mass
manufacture
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manufacturing
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 and consumption structure of
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food
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the food
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 industry.
Due to
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 the poor
economics
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, most consumers
prefere
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prefer
 to buy
low cost
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low-cost
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products
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instead
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 of expensive
products
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.
Manufacturer
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The manufacturer
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 enables to
make
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making
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 low
cost
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low-cost
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products
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 by constantly buying tremendous
amount
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amounts
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 of materials needed for
products
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.
As a result
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, excessive
products
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 are provided constantly, leading to
significant
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a significant
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 amount of
food
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waste
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. To tackle
this
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problem
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, it is inevitable to reconsider the negative structure of
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food
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the food
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 industry.
Firstly
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, not only the
companies
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 but
also
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 the consumers should be aware of the consequences of buying cheap
products
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, because all individuals are equally responsible for the
problem
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.
Furthermore
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, the government should put
tax
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a tax
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 on the
companies
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 producing
food
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waste
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 and
subsidies
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subsidise
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the ones
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those
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 with less
food
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waste
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, using the income of the tax. By
this
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 policy,
companies
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 will choose eco-friendly
food
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 production rather than low
cost-oriented
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low-cost-oriented
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 method in a sustainable way.
To conclude
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, there is a growing concern
of
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about
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 enormous
food
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waste
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.
This
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 is likely to be the consequence of mass
food
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 manufacture and consumption to provide affordable
products
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 to households. I believe that
It
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it
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 can possibly be solved by taxing
companies
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 with
food
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waste
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waste,
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whereas
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subsidizing
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subsidising
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companies
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 without it. In my opinion,
this
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 solution could
both be
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be both
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 effective and sustainable at the same time.

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structure
Add a clear topic sentence in each paragraph and show one main idea per paragraph.
coherence
Use simple linking words to show cause and effect and order of ideas.
content
Give real, simple examples to back up your points.
grammar
Check grammar: fix plural and verb form and use common words.
conclusion
End with a short restatement of your main idea in the conclusion.
content
The essay shows a clear aim and a two-part idea (cause and solution).
structure
An introduction and a conclusion are included.
content
The idea of taxing waste and giving subsidies is on topic.

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • food
  • waste
  • people
  • problem
  • reason
  • cause
  • plan
  • meal
  • shop
  • buy
  • store
  • keep
  • leftovers
  • use up
  • portion
  • size
  • pack
  • sale
  • big
  • small
  • list
  • money
  • time
  • cook
  • eat
  • share
  • give away
  • donate
  • date
  • label
  • use by
  • best before
  • awareness
  • learn
  • teach
  • school
  • home
  • near date
  • store well
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