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The internet has changed the way people share and use information, but it has also create problem that did not exit in the past. What are the main problems assosiated with the internet? What solutions can you suggest?

Using the
internet
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 is an essential source to share
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information. Nowadays, many people are facing some problems
of
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with
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 overusing the
internet
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 compared to the past.
This
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 essay examines the reasons for online issues and suggests ways to tackle
it
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them
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. One main reason for
this
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 problem is
spending
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that spending
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 too much time on
screen
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the screen
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 can
effect
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affect
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on
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real-life communication and skills.
For example
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, people usually prefer
chating
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chatting
 on social platforms
than
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to
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 face-to-face interaction, which leads to isolation and misunderstanding without tone or body language. Another cause for addiction
on
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to
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website
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websites
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 is
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reduced
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 productivity and
affect
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affects
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 health.
In other words
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, more time on the
internet
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 brings negative effects on eyesight and the mind.
This
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 reason leads to less creativity and productivity. We can do a lot to solve these problems. They can be solved by
limited
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limiting
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 the usage of the
internet
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,
use
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using
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 it only for necessary things and
change
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changing
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 the ways of communication with others.
As a result
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, they will enjoy talking with their family and friends without any misunderstanding and improve their skills,
such
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 as critical thinking. In conclusion,
it is clear that
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 the usage of the
internet
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 has changed and become a serious issue in modern society.
However
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, if people use it in the right way and take responsibility
about
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for
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 their health,
this
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 problem can be effectively
reduce
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reduced
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 in the future.

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planning
Plan your essay with a short map. Write one sentence for the plan in the intro. Then write 2 body parts for the two asks, and finish with a short end.
structure
Make a clear point at the start of each paragraph. Use a topic sentence.
grammar spelling
Use simple words and fix common errors. Check spellings like 'chatting', 'assosiated' and 'health'.
examples
Give a real or local example to show your point. Numbers or facts can help your claim.
idea
You show a clear idea that the net use can harm real life talk.
structure
You show a plan in your essay, with clear split of part 1 and part 2.
Your opinion

Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.

If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.

Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

Here are examples of instructions that require you to give your opinion:

...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

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