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The visuals give information about the number of spacecraft launched by various national governments between 1957 and 2007 and the purpose of each mission.

The pie chart compares the
numbers
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 of spaceships launched by 9 distinct governments during a span of 50 years from 1957 to 2007, and the bar chart illustrates why these
government
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governments
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 launched these spacecrafts.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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Soviet
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the Soviet
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 Union- or Russia nowadays- was the most active state regarding
space
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missions
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.
In
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contrast
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 Canada was showing less interest compared to the others. The bar graph
also
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 made it clear that the main purpose of most of these
missions
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 was
communicating
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. It is observed that Russia and the USA had
relatively
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a relatively
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 high number of
mission
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missions
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 throughout the 5 decades
with
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, with
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 3484 and 1760 launches respectively
,
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.
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 Commercial
in
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, in
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 the second
place
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place,
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 started almost half the total
of
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number of
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missions
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 that the USA had
with
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, with
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 539.
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, India was responsible for 48
missions
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 only
,
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similarly
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, the total of spaceships that Canada launched was even less by 20. The primary reason that motivated these countries to be involved in
space
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missions
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 was communications
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 a percentage of 26%
space
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missions
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 started for
this
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 purpose. Surveillance satellites
was
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 the reason for almost 20% of the
space
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 journeys, which is
also
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 considered to be relatively high.
In
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 the other hand
about
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, about
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 only 5% of the
missions
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 accounted
weather
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for weather
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 observation and planetary exploration
ass
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as
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 their purpose.

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task
Have one clear overall idea in the first line. Then give main clues in order.
data
Check the facts from the charts. Be sure numbers match and are right.
coherence
Use simple linking words to join ideas: also, but, in addition, for example.
grammar
Use plain grammar. Watch plural s and verb form.
content
You give an overall idea of the charts.
data
You give some numbers from the charts.
structure
The writing has an intro and a clear aim.
Fully explain your ideas

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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