The visuals give information about the number of spacecraft launched by various national governments between 1957 and 2007 and the purpose of each mission.

The pie chart compares the
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of spaceships launched by 9 distinct governments during a span of 50 years from 1957 to 2007, and the bar chart illustrates why these
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governments
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launched these spacecrafts.
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it is clear that
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the Soviet
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Union- or Russia nowadays- was the most active state regarding
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.
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Canada was showing less interest compared to the others. The bar graph
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made it clear that the main purpose of most of these
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was
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. It is observed that Russia and the USA had
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a relatively
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high number of
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missions
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throughout the 5 decades
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3484 and 1760 launches respectively
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Commercial
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the second
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started almost half the total
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missions
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that the USA had
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539.
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, India was responsible for 48
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only
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similarly
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, the total of spaceships that Canada launched was even less by 20. The primary reason that motivated these countries to be involved in
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missions
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was communications
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a percentage of 26%
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missions
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started for
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purpose. Surveillance satellites
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the reason for almost 20% of the
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journeys, which is
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considered to be relatively high.
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the other hand
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only 5% of the
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accounted
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observation and planetary exploration
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their purpose.

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task
Have one clear overall idea in the first line. Then give main clues in order.
data
Check the facts from the charts. Be sure numbers match and are right.
coherence
Use simple linking words to join ideas: also, but, in addition, for example.
grammar
Use plain grammar. Watch plural s and verb form.
content
You give an overall idea of the charts.
data
You give some numbers from the charts.
structure
The writing has an intro and a clear aim.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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