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Band 3

Environmental damage is a problem in most countries. What is the cause of this damage? What should be done about this problem?

Nowadays, most nations are facing some problems of environment.
This
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 essay examines the reasons for environmental damage and suggests ways to tackle them. More
industrial
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industry
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 in the country
are
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is
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 one main reason for
this
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 issue. To illustrate, many factories
throwing
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throw
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 waste into water and
rivers
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rivers,
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that
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which
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cause
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causes
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 fish and
harms
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ecosystems. Another cause is that overpopulation means more waste, pollution, and overuse of cars.
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, in modern
cities
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 heavy traffic
increase
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increases
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 carbon emissions that cause air pollution
due to
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 more vehicles.
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, some people
cutting
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 down trees,
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this
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 leads to reduce oxygen,
increase
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an increase
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carbon
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in carbon
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, and
harm
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harmful
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 gases. In
this
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 case, health problems will increase dramatically. The government and individuals can do a lot to solve these issues.
Firstly
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, the government should encourage people to use public transport
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such
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 as trains and buses
in
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, in
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 order to reduce emissions and smog.
Secondly
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, educate individuals
how
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about how
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is
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plants are important to have quality air, by
engage
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 them
to
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with
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 plants in their houses.
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, recycling is a great way to protect
the
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nature.
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, in Oman
citizens
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, citizens
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 are using paper bags and glasses
instead
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 of plastic ones.
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, both should take actions even
it
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if it
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 is simple to make
difference
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. In conclusion,
it is clear that
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environment
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environmental
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challenge
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challenges
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has
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have
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 become a debate issue in modern society.
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, if both individuals and
government
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the government
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 take responsibility and work together by
raise a weariness
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raising awareness
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 and
use
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using
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 public
transportations
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transportation
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,
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apply
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 and recycling,
this
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 problem can be effectively
reduce
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reduced
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 in the future.

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task
Make your answer more clear. Add more detail on how to fix the issue and give one or two real steps.
coherence
Use simple link words to show how ideas move from cause to fix.
grammar
Check grammar. Use are with plural and is with single. Watch verb form.
vocabulary
Use only common words. Keep language short and clear.
structure
Intro and conclusion are present.
content
There is a plan to show causes and fix.
coherence
The idea of government and people is used.
Answer the 'Problem and Solution' topic

Problem-and-solution essays fall naturally into two parts, the first describing and exploring the problem, the second setting out the solution or solutions.

You essay structure should look something like this:

  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – Problems
  • Body paragraph 2 – Solutions
  • Conclusion

Examples to start your body paragraph:

  • One of the first problems of the...
  • Another problem that needs to be considered...
  • A possible solution to this problem would be...
  • One immediate practical solution is to...

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • industrialization
  • habitat destruction
  • urbanization
  • overpopulation
  • overexploitation
  • deforestation
  • biodiversity
  • waste management
  • fossil fuels
  • air pollution
  • climate change
  • renewable energy
  • sustainable agriculture
  • recycling systems
  • international cooperation
  • conservation
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