In many countries around the world, rural people are moving to cities, so the population in the countryside is decreasing. Do you think this is a positive or a negative development? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

In some societies, rural dwellers' migration to
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tends to be an increasing trend at the expense of the depopulation of villages. I assume
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trend is associated with imposing a latent cost on both governments and societies , and I will shed light on the two most important disadvantages of
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transformation that affect nations negatively.
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rural inhabitants migrate to urban areas, some essential activities ,
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as agriculture , that depend on the rural workforce will face critical problems. Based on statistics , more than 70% of agriculture, both traditional and intensive ones, relied on rural labourers and with the depopulation of villages, the food industry will face with shortage
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work.
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complex matter turns to either food shortage or governmental investment for training and engaging workforces from other districts. I believe
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imposes hidden costs on government and society.
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, excessive immigration to
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leads to overcrowding in these areas and leads to other critical problems for not only citizens but
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the government in some ways.
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, an overcrowded city means changes are needed in infrastructure to meet overplanned demands; namely, habitat, transportation, health care, and other facilities that impose exaggerated payments to governments.
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, living in an overpopulated city with a fast-paced lifestyle style associated with stress and anxiety for individuals , and
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matter , alongside high levels of pollutants in overcrowded
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reported as the most significant factor in decreasing public health. In conclusion, increasing rural dwellers' immigration to urban areas is a harmful transformation that has the potential to impose a high level of unfair cost to the government through food shortage, training
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native farming workforce, providing unplanned demands originating from excessive immigration to
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, and decreasing public health.

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task
Your view on the topic is clear, but the answer would be stronger with a short start and a clear end that restate your view.
coherence
Make the plan simple: one idea per paragraph and use easy links like and, but, so, also.
grammar
Some sentences are long and hard. Use shorter sentences.
content
Add a real example from life or news to back each point.
content
The topic is clear and you state a view to the topic.
structure
Two main ideas are shown: farming work and city crowding.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • rural-to-urban migration
  • population shift
  • positive impact
  • negative impact
  • urbanization
  • job opportunities
  • access to education
  • access to healthcare
  • urban infrastructure
  • rural traditions
  • cultural heritage
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