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The bar chart shows the number of visits to a community website in the first and second years of use.

The bar chart shows the number of visits to a community website in the first and second years of use.
The bar chart illustrates the number of visits to a community website during its first and second years of operation.
Overall
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, it is evident that the number of visits roughly doubled in most months in the second
year
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. In June, there was a marked increase in visits compared to the first
year
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,
whereas
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 August experienced a slight decline. In the first
year
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, February and March recorded the lowest figures, at approximately 1,000
visitors
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 each.
In contrast
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, August reached the highest number, with about 15,000
visitors
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. The figures for July and June were roughly 13,000 and 12,000, respectively,
while
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 November and December were very similar, with around 10,000
visitors
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 each. During the second
year
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, visitor numbers rose sharply in most months. Both June and July witnessed a substantial surge, reaching 22,500. December and November again showed comparable figures, at approximately 17,500,
whereas
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 February and March increased significantly from around 1,000 to 10,000
visitors
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.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "whereas".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 89%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words year, visitors with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "roughly" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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