Government investment in the arts, such as music and theatre, is a waste of money. Government must invest this money in puplic services instead. Do you agree or disagree?

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those who love arts and music or any other hobbies to improve their skills and do
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task response
Be clear what you think from the start. Put your main view in the end as one clear line.
structure
Make one idea in each paragraph and use a simple opening sentence to show what that paragraph will say.
language
Check spell and grammar. Use normal words that you know well.
coherence
Link ideas with simple words: however, also, in addition, for example.
development
Give a better example for each point and say why it helps the country.
content
The essay tries to cover both sides of the issue.
structure
There is a clear plan with an introduction and a conclusion.
content
It uses some real ideas about tourism and youth.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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