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Some people say it is necessary to create a new language that improves international communication. Do you think the benefits outweigh the drawbacks?

Nowadays, some people argue that creating a new
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 to improve global
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 is necessary.
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 essay will discuss both advantages and disadvantages
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 the issue and explain why I think it brings more benefits than drawbacks. On the one hand, in
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 society, creating a new
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 to enhance
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 among different ethnic groups greatly contributes to
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 social progress.
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, with a common
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, many developing countries gain the right to share the latest knowledge with developed nations. These nations can access cutting-edge
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 on environmental, medical, and technological advancements, thereby improving their quality of life.
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, much cutting-edge research is published in English. Developing nations or those with weaker English proficiency often face an
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 gap compared to advanced countries.
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 disparity prevents the implementation of new medical technologies locally, potentially costing countless lives that could have been saved.
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, a shared
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 enables
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 to understand local signage and better integrate into local cultures when visiting different countries, ultimately enhancing their
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 travel experience.
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, having the entire global population communicate through a single
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 carries drawbacks
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 as cultural erosion and
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 gaps.
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 for
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, it may lead many to neglect or disregard the development of their own national languages.
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 could cause languages rich in local culture and history to gradually disappear, resulting in the regrettable loss of cultural heritage worthy of preservation.
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, for the elderly or those accustomed to their native languages, established linguistic patterns in their brains may make learning a new
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 challenging and uncomfortable, potentially widening the
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 gap.
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, these drawbacks can be mitigated by restricting the use of
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 new common
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 to specific settings—
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 as international conferences or tourist destinations—
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 significantly enhancing global
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. In conclusion,
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 creating a new
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 that improves international
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 causes a few disadvantages, it still creates a huge convenience to bring lots of benefits for equality and travel in global society.

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task response
You answer the task well and give a view on the issue.
coherence
Use clear signs to show your mind moves. Try to put one clear idea in each paragraph.
grammar
Some sentences are long. Break them into shorter pieces to help the reader.
content
Add more exact examples or facts to back your claims.
structure
Finish with a strong restatement of your view in the last line.
content
Clear view on the topic.
language
Good use of linking words like firstly, secondly, however.
structure
Essay follows a good layout: intro, two body para, conclusion.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • international communication
  • global unity
  • communication barriers
  • economic efficiency
  • translation costs
  • linguistic diversity
  • cultural identities
  • feasibility
  • implementation challenges
  • historical precedents
  • Esperanto
  • adoption
  • evolution
  • promoting a new language
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