Some people believe that governments should spend money on building more public libraries, while others think this is a waste of money because people can access information online. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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various public
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often a debatable topic amongst different countries. Public libraries
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one
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amenities
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that needs to
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more by the government is often argued by
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individuals.
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, some
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are against
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idea as in their view it is not profitable,
due to
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the availability of online resources.
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essay will discuss both the views and argue why
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the construction
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of
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a public
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library
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is not a necessity. The perspective of
people
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who believe that having more public
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library
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libraries
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is important would be
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accessibility
of more workspaces. The
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environment
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library
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the library
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is
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apply
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quieter than other public spaces. As
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people
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can work or study with more focus
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and
attention.
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students studying for competitive exams usually prefer to prepare in a silent surrounding
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having a public
library
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nearby
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would
be beneficial.
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to that, these
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would be more cost-effective . If
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want to carry out their daily
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or study , they usually visit a nearby cafe or
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. These local
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eateries
charge
havy
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heavy
prices on coffee or food
that is
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being served.
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these
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spaces are free of cost or have a subsidised entry
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fee
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, making them
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a less-expensive
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less-expensive
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less expensive
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option for learning.
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, other
people
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argue that
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spending
money to build
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library
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a library
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is not beneficial because of several reasons.
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, these funds can be used on
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facilities
that are of paramount importance. Many countries have
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infrastructure of services that are essential
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such
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, such
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as
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hospitals
, schools and roads.
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neglecting
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such
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concerns and investing money in the construction public
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would not be
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justifiable
for the well-being of the community. Apart from that,
sutdents
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students
can access online using various sources that are available
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it
more
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a more
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convenient learning method .

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task response
Make your view clear at the start and end. State your answer in the intro and restate it in the conclusion.
coherence
Use simple links like and, but, also, for example to connect ideas and guide the reader.
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Give one or two clear examples and explain them so a reader can see how the idea works.
language use
Fix spelling and grammar. Use short, direct sentences.
coherence
Add a short, closing paragraph that sums up your view and ends the essay well.
content
The essay shows both sides of the issue.
structure
There are clear paragraphs for different ideas.
content
Some useful examples about cost and online access are given.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general
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