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Writing Samples
Band 3

The main purpose of public libraries is to provide books and they do not waste their limited resources and space on providing expensive hi tech media such as computer software ,videos and dvd . to what extent do you agree or disagree with statement.

The major purpose of
public-libraries
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public libraries
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 is to present only books as their
scrace resoucrce
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scarce resource
 and space can't meet the
modren
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modern
 standards of society
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,
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which
demanding
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demand
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 things
such
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 as computer software, video, and DVD. I totally disagree with
this
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 statement, because there
are
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is
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 data that
are
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is
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 important for the majority of students, but it
exist
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exists
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 exclusively in
internet
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the internet
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 space ,
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 to
help
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helping
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 them in their research by using tools like AI. The availability of smart devices can help
people
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to
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apply
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access data that can benefit them. The presence of these
appliance
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appliances
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 offers websites and E-books which contain a variety of knowledge.
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, a survey conducted in NewYork, USA found out that a significant portion of
people
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relies
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rely
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 on electronic tools and can't live without
it
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them
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.
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Also
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 the presence of smart
device
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devices
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 in
library
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libraries is
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consider
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considered
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 an important part of
students
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students'
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life
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lives
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.
Such
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 things can help scholars to understand and learn new lessons that can help them in their
acadmic
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academic
 journey.
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, a university in Utah did
an
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a
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 survey where they found that the majority of
people
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 depend on electronic sources to watch
explaining
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 videos. In conclusion, the
availablity
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availability
 of devices is
consider
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considered
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 an important part for
people
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 to
accesss
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access
 information and helps students in their research.

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task response
Be very clear in your view at once and keep to it. Add more strong reasons and simple, real examples that fit the task. Each paragraph should have one main idea that supports your view, with a short link to the next idea.
coherence
Make the link between ideas easy to follow. Use simple connectors like 'also', 'for example', 'in addition', 'but', and repeat naming to avoid mix up. Check your spelling and keep one idea per paragraph for better flow.
stance clarity
Your position on the topic is clear.
evidence used
You use real life examples to back your point.
structure
There is a basic shape of intro, body, and conclusion.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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