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The chart below shows tea and coffee consumption in 2015 Write a summary of the information. Select and reportthe main features, and make comparisons where necessary.

The chart below shows tea and coffee consumption in 2015 Write a summary of the information. Select and reportthe main features, and make comparisons where necessary.
The bar chart compares the amount of
tea
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 and
coffee
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 consumed in 2015 in 7 different countries. It is measured in
Kilograms
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 per
person
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.
It is clear that
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coffee
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 is more consumed in most countries, with the highest
consumption
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 being in Canada and
United
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the United
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states
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States
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. The
Britions
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Britons
 have
same
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the same
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 intake in both
tea
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 and
coffee
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,
while
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 the population in Turkey and Russia prefer
Tea
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 to
coffee
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. Canada has the highest
persons
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number of people
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 who consume
coffee
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with
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, with
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 just above 6
Kilograms
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 per
person
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, followed by the United States with about 5.5
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Kilogram
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kilograms
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 per
person
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. New
Zeeland
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Zealand
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 has nearly 4
kilograms
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 consumed
and
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, and
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 Australia
having
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has
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 around 3
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Kilogram
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kilograms
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 per
person
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.
Tea
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 taken by persons in
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this
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these
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 countries mostly
have
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has
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 a
consumption
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less
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of less
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 than 2
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Kilogram
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kilograms
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 per
person
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. Turkey has the largest population
who
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that
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love
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loves
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tea
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with
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, with
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intake
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an intake
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 of about 5
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kilogram
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kilograms
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 per
person
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. Russia have
tea
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 lovers accounting for almost 2.5
Kilograms
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 of
consumption
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 per
person
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. The United Kingdom have
approxiamately
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approximately
 3
Kilograms
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 per
person
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consumption
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 in both
coffee
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 and
tea
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.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words tea, coffee, kilograms, person, consumption, kilogram with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • consumption
  • region
  • trend
  • comparison
  • pattern
  • cultural factors
  • availability
  • price
  • anomalies
  • unexpected
  • preferences
  • Western countries
  • Asian countries
  • report
  • main features
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