Missions to explore space are hugely expensive, and there are problems on Earth which demand attention. The number of these missions needs to be reduced. Do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer, and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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hugely expensive.
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issue is important because it influences our daily life and future. Some
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give my simple opinion. Body1: First of
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there are some good points about
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. One reason is that it can help
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in education and work.
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many scientists and engineers can improve their skills through
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research
and new
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technologies
. Another reason is that it makes life more convenient and faster.
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families and friends can connect and get information easily because of satellites that were developed for
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missions. Because of these benefits, many
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believe that exploring
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an important role in modern society and brings clear advantages for the future.
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some problems. One problem is that
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depend too much on it
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can
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health or social
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if someone
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too much time. In
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missions cost a lot of money. In my
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it is good to explore
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nevertheless
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we should
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use money to help
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on Earth.

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