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The chart below shows the percentages of different types of household waste that were recycled in one city between 1992 and 2002. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the percentages of different types of household waste that were recycled in one city between 1992 and 2002. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The
barchart
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bar chart
 shows the one city that recycled various types of household waste from 1992 to 2002.
Overall
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, the
percentage
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 of all materials experienced different trends in the time period.
While
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 the
percentage
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 of
glass
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 and paper rose each year, plastic and cans
stay
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remained
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 almost stable. It is obvious that the proportion of plastic did not change in 1997 and 2002
,
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;
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however
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, it was a little bit
lass
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less
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 in 1992, which constituted approximately 15%. The cans, which showed a similar
percentage
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 in 1997
with
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as
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 in 1992 in the
glass
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 and paper. Regarding the
glass
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percentage
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 of household recycling showed about 15% in 1992 .
By contrast
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 , in 1997, the
proposion
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proportion
 was illustrated just below 30% and rose to around 50% in 2002
year
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apply
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. The
percentage
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 of recycling paper was
also
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 like a
glass
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.
This
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 figure starts with about 15% and
2002
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in 2002
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 it rose significantly to around 40%.

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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words percentage, glass with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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