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Band 3.5

Some people believe education should be free for everyone, while others disagree. Discuss both view and give your opinion.

Education
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 is an essential part of our
lifes
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lives
.
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, some individuals think that
education
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 should be available for all
people
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.
However
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, others disagree with that thought.
This
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 essay will discuss both
view
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views
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 and explain why I believe
education
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 should be free for every
students
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student
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. On the one hand, many
people
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 believe that studying in school or university must be
reachable
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accessible
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for
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to
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 everyone. The government can create rules for accessible
education
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 because being a member of
poor
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a poor
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 family can create a barrier to
reach
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reaching
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 academic goals.
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, if someone
want
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wants
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 to study in a
fee
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-paying school,course or university, parents have to pay
tution
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tuition
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fee
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fees
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 for their children. When families
do
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are
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 not able to pay tuition
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fee
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fees
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, their children can be upset and may
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withdraw
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 from
education
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.
Because of
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For
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 that reason,
education
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 should be free for all
people
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.
On the other hand
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, some individuals support paid
education
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. They think that
fee
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-paying educational institutions can be
more
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better
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well-equipped
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equipped
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.
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, if parents pay
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fee
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fees
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 for schools, courses or universities,
board
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the board
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 of directors can be able to buy new
equipments
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equipment
, smart boards, substances, well-designed maps or other useful things.
Additionally
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, they want to create
safe
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a safe
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 place for
childrens
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children
like
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, like
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 using a card access to avoid strange
people
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 from
that
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those
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 places. In conclusion,
although
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 some
people
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thing
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think
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 paying
tution
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tuition
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fee
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fees
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 is
essential
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an essential
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 part of
education
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 because it
create
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creates
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 a safe and
well-equiped
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well-equipped
 place. I personally believe that
,
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apply
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education
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 should be accessible for everybody, as all students can achieve their goals.

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content
Make ideas more linked and show how they help. Add simple facts or real life examples to back each point.
structure
Plan before writing: - start with a short intro that states your view, - write one paragraph for each side, - finish with a short conclusion.
language
Check spelling and small mistakes (tuition, equipment, children). Use simple, correct sentences.
structure
There is a clear plan with intro, body, and conclusion.
cohesion
Link words like On the one hand, On the other hand are used.
content
The writer shows what view is.

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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