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Band 0.5

some poeople think that universities should be free while others argue that students should pay for higher education.

In recent years, a significant debate has emerged over whether higher education should be free or
payments-based
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payment-based
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. Advocates of the first view argue that free education plays a crucial role in fostering social equality and increasing
labour
Correct article usage
the labour
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 force,
while
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 opponents claim that tuition fees allow universities to expand facilities and organise events.
This
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 essay will discuss both perspectives and present my personal viewpoint.

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structure
Your introduction states the topic and plan, but the body is missing. Add 2-3 paragraphs with main ideas and reasons.
content
Make your own view clear in one sentence, then give reasons and a small example.
coherence
Link ideas with simple words like also, but, because to help flow.
content
Give one or two simple examples to back up points about free education and fees.
content
The topic is clear from the start.
structure
You show both sides of the issue.
content
You say you will give your own view.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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