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Band 2.5

Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? In twenty years there will be fewer cars in use than there are today. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

It is believed by some that the number of cars used will decline over the next two decades.
This
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 essay agrees with
this
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 view and proceeds to elaborate on the
reason
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reasons
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 for
this
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, being
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being
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including
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 improvement in public
transport
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 and the rising fuel costs. In the past few
years
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years,
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 there has been an increasing trend in the usage of public
transport
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 in major cities around the world.The governments of major economies around the world are investing heavily in
advance
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advanced
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 public
transport
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like
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 a dense network of metro trains.
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this
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, the connectivity between various regions within the country has been enhanced.
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, the number of private car
usage
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users
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 is decreasing. As we know that the various fossil
fuels
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 used in vehicles
is
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are
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 a limited non
renewable
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non-renewable
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 resource which cannot be recreated in a lab once the existing stock underneath
earth's
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the earth's
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 crust is completely extracted.The rising scarcity of fossil
fuels
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 has caused
the
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apply
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prices to rise steadily over the years
and
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 these prices will keep increasing exponentially as the
fuels
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 become more and more scarce.
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, over the next two decades ,
due to
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 unaffordable prices of fossil
fuels
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 and public
transport
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 like metro rail becoming increasingly accessible and affordable to
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the masses
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masses
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masses,
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 the number of cars is bound to plummet.

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task response
Your view is clear, but you give few facts to back it up. Add real data, city names, or changes in plans to show the point.
coherence and cohesion
Make your essay easy to read. Use clear start for each paragraph and use simple sign words like first, also, but, so, then, finally to keep flow.
strength
You show a clear view and say you agree with the statement.
strength
You use some linking words to show cause and effect (thus, consequently).
Fully explain your ideas

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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