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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Children should be required to help with household tasks as soon as they are able to do so. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

When
children
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able
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are able
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 to do
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housework
houseworks
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houseworks,
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 they should help
to
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apply
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their parents.
While
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 I consider
this
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 a positive trend, other factors should
also
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 be taken into
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account
. One main benefit of doing household
tasks
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 is the development of
children
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.
That is
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 to say, they learn how to
doing
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do
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houseworks
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housework
 independently
which
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, which
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 might be useful in their life.
For instance
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,
houshold
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household
tasks
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 include cooking, cleaning, washing, especially outdoor
tasks
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, and learning these activities at
young
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a young
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 age will be advantageous when they stay alone at home or when
thay
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they
 go
to
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on to
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 trip alone.
As a result
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, doing household
works
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work
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 regularly benefits youngsters when they are independent. If it were not, they would struggle and need
help
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the help
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 of others.
However
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, another idea against
this
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 is
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children's
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the children's
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 wish.
In other words
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, some of them do not want to help with
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houseworks
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housework
,
becouse
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because
 they are young and tend to
playing
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play
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.
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, my little brother is ten years old and he is capable of doing
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houseworks
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housework
, but he
prefer
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prefers
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 to
playing
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play
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 with his friends and
having
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have
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a
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apply
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fun.
As a
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result
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result,
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 he never
help
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helps
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 with household
tasks
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,
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;
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however
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, he
spend
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spends
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 time
with
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apply
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a fun
while
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 doing
activity
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activities
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 he loves. If it were not, he would hate working, or he might
also
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lost
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lose
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 his interest
other
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in other
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 activities. In conclusion,
while
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 helping with
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houseworks
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housework
 offers improvement of
independent
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independence
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 in
children
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, it
also
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 comes with
it's
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its
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 drawbacks of losing interest in doing
houshold
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household
works
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work
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.
Therefore
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, striking an intricate balance between the two is crucial to take advantage of each
simultaniously
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simultaneously
.

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structure
Make a plan before you write. Start with a clear view. Then add 2 or 3 main ideas and finish with a short end.
language
Use simple and correct grammar. Check spellings like housework, its, and other common words.
content
Add more real examples to explain your point and show how it helps.
content
The writer states a clear view that children should help with housework.
coherence
There are linking words that show contrast and result.
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