Friendships that take place online rendition not as meaningful as those where people meet each other face to face. Do what extent do you agree or disagree?

There is no denying the fact that

friendship's

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friendships

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are a part of our

life

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lives that

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we all

needed

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while

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it is commonly held belief that

face to face

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face-to-face

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friendship can

stay more

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last

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longer than others

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there is

also

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an argument that online friendships

can stay no longer

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cannot last as long

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because

the

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long ways

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distance

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between them.

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this

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essay will discuss both points of view and share my opinion. On the one

hand

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friendships are not about how long they

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been knowing each other

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, it

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is about the actions that make the relationship

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longer.

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also

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possible that.

strong

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community never changes because of time of even

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person

try's

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to break them.

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for

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example

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show examples

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apply

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and my friends

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my friends and

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only

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meet ones in a year

and

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she is still the same person

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I have

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know

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since

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was 15

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also

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we do not talk

alot

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a lot

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internet

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the internet

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that

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shows how

the

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apply

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strong

relationship

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relationships

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are.

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argument about online friendships

they

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apply

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some times

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sometimes

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it becomes

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apply

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easier to talk to them

knowing

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that they never meet you in person

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.some

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Some

people

dose

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not know how to talk to someone in real life

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they attempt to find one in video games and other apps .

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also

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there is one kind of relationship called job friends

which

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they fuces

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focuses

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on staying together only in jobs

and

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, and

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this

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can not stay longer or

going

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higher

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a higher

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level .

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addition

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techers

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teachers

can relate to

this

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example . In conclusion

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there is no easy answer to

this

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question.

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however

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show examples

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I itend

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itend

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tend

to believe that

friendship

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a friendship

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that builds on respect,love and trust can

stay more

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last

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longer than how

speak

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we speak

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to each

other's

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other

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every day

and

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, and

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they

dose

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not have any.

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Oct 9, 2025

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task

Be clear about your view in the opening. Say your position in one strong line, then keep it in the rest of the essay.

task

Give more clear ideas and use examples that match the point you make.

coherence

Make each paragraph have one main idea. Start with a strong topic sentence and end with a line that links to the next part.

idea

The writer tries to discuss both sides of the topic.

structure

There is a try to use 'on the one hand' and 'on the other hand' to show view.

examples

A personal example is given.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

272 words

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