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Nowadays, many people prefer to buy famous brand of clothes, cars and other items. What are the reasons for this? Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

Noise aversion in dogs often begins quietly, almost unnoticed, a flinch at a sound, a heartbeat that races before the thunder arrives. To many
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 it seems trivial at
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but for the dog, it is real and consuming. Among the options now available for managing fear-based
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 in dogs.

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Task response: The piece starts by saying dogs have noise fear, but it does not say what to do or what options are. Add a clear main idea and then list simple ways to help the dog, with one or two small examples.
coherence
Coherence and cohesion: The text has few links and not clear paragraph breaks. Use one idea per paragraph. Start with First, Then, Next, Finally to show steps. Use easy connectors like and, also, but, to link ideas.
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Topic is clear about dog noise fear.
structure
There is some order from problem to possible help.
Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Brand Loyalty: Consumer preference for a particular brand that results in continual purchase over time.
  • Status Symbol: An item that signifies one's social or economic status.
  • Prestige: Widespread respect and admiration felt for someone or something on the basis of a perception of their achievements or quality.
  • Quality Assurance: The maintenance of a desired level of quality in a service or product.
  • Innovation: The introduction of new ideas, methods, or products.
  • Marketing Strategy: A business’s plan for reaching prospective consumers and turning them into customers of their products or services.
  • Consumerism: The preoccupation of society with the acquisition of consumer goods.
  • Peer Pressure: Influence from members of one's peer group to behave in a way that is acceptable or similar to them.
  • Advertising Influence: The effect that advertising has on consumer decisions.
  • Materialism: A tendency to consider material possessions and physical comfort as more important than spiritual values.
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