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The diagram below shows the process for producing and recycling paper. Provide an overview of the information by identifying and describing the key details, and include comparisons where appropriate.

The diagram below shows the process for producing and recycling paper. Provide an overview of the information by identifying and describing the key details, and include comparisons where appropriate.
The diagram given illustrates how paper is produced and recycled
on
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 every stage. In order to produce
newspapers
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 and recycle them, the process involves ten steps from scratch to a final result. There are two options to make
newspapers
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: from
a
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freshly cut
wood
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 or
pulp
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 that was made
of
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 used
newspapers
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.
At the first stage
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, trees are
felling
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felled
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 and
transferring
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transferred
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 to a drum where bark is removed. After that, a chipper is involved in order to create
wood
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 chippings that go through the machine. Having been chopped
in
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into
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 small pieces, the
wood
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pulp
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 goes to a refiner and
pulp
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 for
removing
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remove
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 dirt and insects, which could be
into
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in
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 the
wood
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. The paper stock
then
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 passes through a
pulp
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 pressing to form sheets of paper, which are rolled and used for newspaper printing.
Besides
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, used
newspapers
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 could be recycled by going through the step of removing ink. It helps to create a clean
pulp
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 that will go through the same stages as with a felling and create some new
newspapers
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.

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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words newspapers, wood, pulp with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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