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some people say history is one of the most important school subject. other people think that, in today's world, subject like scince and technology are more important than history. discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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 which is the most
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 school subject in today's world. Some argued that history is indispensable for
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 our present world, others contend that science and technology deserve greater subject
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nowadays. In
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perspective
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 before
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 believe history of the essence owing to its guide to
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 identity.The most
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 thing is
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 can learn from the past, avoid repeating the same mistakes.
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 us know the
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importance
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 peace and love, let everybody know how dangerous
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ultranationalism
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task response
Plan your essay. State both sides and then give your own view.
grammar
Use short, simple sentences. Check grammar and spelling.
coherence
Link ideas with easy words like 'first', 'then', 'also', 'but', 'for example'.
structure
End with a short conclusion that repeats your view.
structure
There is an attempt to discuss both views.
content
There is a basic plan and some example.
coherence
Basic linking words are used in places.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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