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Band 2.5

the only rteason why people work hard is ythat to earn money and there is no others reasons for ding .so to what extent do you agree and dis agree

Some people argue that the only reason individuals work is to earn
money
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 and that there are no other motivations behind their efforts. I agree with the idea that most people work primarily to seek financial gain. The key reason is that
money
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 is a significant motivator for working hard. Many people work because of the benefits it provides, and the most crucial motivator is
money
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. It helps meet the basic needs of life. As you know,
money
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 is essential for survival, as it ensures access to food, shelter, and education. Without financial resources, it becomes difficult to buy necessities or pay for education.
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, earning
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 is important for improving one’s quality of life.

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Task Response
State your view clearly at the start and give a short plan in one sentence. Add a short look at the other side and end with a small closing line.
Task Response
Add more ideas beyond money. Give a real example or two to show other motives, like work for skill, help family, or pride.
Coherence and Cohesion
Make one idea in each paragraph. Use clear links to show order, like first, next, then, and finally. Keep the verbs in one tense.
Task Response
The writer shows a clear view on the topic.
Coherence
The talk keeps a steady flow as it moves from money to life quality.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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