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Describe the changes in Porth Harbour from 2000 and the current year

The map given outlines Porth Harbour in the year 2000 and in the current year.
Overall
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, it is visible that there is no major structural change, but there are plenty of quality of life improvements,
such
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 as
,
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apply
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 restrooms,
cafeteria
Correct article usage
a cafeteria
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, and shops. One of the major changes is
,
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apply
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 the
decommissoned
Correct your spelling
decommissioned
 castle that was not being used. In the current year,
this
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 has been converted into a hotel.
Furthermore
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, the public beach behind the castle has been made private under the hotel's property. The designated spots for Marina
which
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, which
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 have private yachts and the fishing
boats
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boats,
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has
Correct subject-verb agreement
have
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 been interchanged to accommodate the increased traffic from the hotel, which resulted in the opening of a cafe and multiple shops.
Conversely
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, an extra dock has
also
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 been added at
present
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the present
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 time, increasing the capacity.
Previously
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Previously,
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 only a single ship was able to dock at a time. The capacity has now doubled to 2 dockings. To summarise, there have
multiple
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been multiple
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 positive changes to Porth Harbour, making it more accessible and
tourist friendly
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tourist-friendly
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.

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overview
Fix the wrong idea that there was no big change. Start with a short view of what changed from 2000 to now.
structure
Put ideas in order: first the castle changes, then the new dock, then home and shops. Use words like first, next, then, finally.
grammar
Check spelling and form in sentences (for example, decommissioned, not decommissioned; use 'has' with plural nouns).
content
Give clear facts from the map. Name places or items like castle, hotel, beach, dock, cafe.
task response
The writer tries to compare two times and show changes.
coherence
Good use of connect words such as 'furthermore' and 'conversely' to join ideas.
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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