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Band 4

Do you know that now a days many people don't do enough physical exercises. Give the reasons for this and give solutions.

Do you know that
now a days
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nowadays
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 many
people
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 don'
t
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anough
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enough
 physical
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exercises
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exercise
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.
People
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that
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who
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 don'
t
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 do that have many causes
but
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, but
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,
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ther
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there
 are more and more
solution
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 for
ti
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.
Thre
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 are many causes for
people
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that
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who
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dont
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don't
 do
anough
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enough
 exercise.
First,
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the bad weather in some
counters
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countries
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.Kuwait is one of the countries that
have
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 a hot weather even at night.
People
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 who live in it
cant
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can't
 even go for a
woke wath
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walk
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out
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without
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 getting a
sun bern
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sunburn
. Second,most
gron up
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grown-up
people
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t
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exercises
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.
Work
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at
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in
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 some countries
take50
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takes 50
 hours per
a
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apply
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week at
lest
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least
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.
People
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 like to
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at
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in
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morning
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the morning
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.But, the grone
people
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cant
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can't
.
Finally
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,
people
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now a days
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nowadays
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 are lazy and
wouldint
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wouldn't
 do any exercise.One of the reasons that
people
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 are lazy is the unhealthy food.
People
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 come
frome ther
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from their
work
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 tired and lazy.
However
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,
ther
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there
 are some solutions for that.
First,
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workout
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work out
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 at home and
gyms
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at gyms
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. That way
people
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 at any time.
People
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 will forget about the weather and the
ran
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rain
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.Second,if
people
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orgnic
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organic
 there time they'll have cable of hours .Many
people
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 go to sleep after
work
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antel
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and until
 8pm.Some
people
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exercise
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 after
the
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apply
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work
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.
Finally
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,
geting
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getting
 enough sleep will
halp
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help
people
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 at
work
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out
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apply
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and
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.Many doctors say that sleeping well
ancres
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anchors
 body power.
People
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t
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workout
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work out
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 because
thy
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they
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dont
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don't
 have
enogh
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enough
 power for it. In the
end
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end,
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phsical
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physical
exercises
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is
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are
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 not
hard
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as hard
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 as
people
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 think. Don'
t
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at
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with
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pull
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pull-ups
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 up but
,
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apply
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 start with waking. In my opinion any
one
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anyone
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 can
workout
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work out
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 and be a
gymnastics
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gymnast
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.

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language
Fix many spell and word mistakes to help clear meaning.
structure
Put one idea in each paragraph. Start with a small general line, then details.
structure
Use clear links to show how ideas go from cause to fix.
content
Give a simple example for each point so the reader can see facts.
style
Use only easy words and short sentences.
content
The writer tries to talk about uses and fix to a problem.
content
There is a plan to add more fix methods.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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