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Band 4.5

More people prefer to buy ready-made food from restaurants or convenience stores instead of cooking at home.

In recent years, many individuals find
convenient
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it convenient
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 to eat fast
food
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 rather than preparing at home.
This
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 essay will discuss both the merits and demerits of receiving
read-made
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ready-made
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 meals. One major benefit of eating takeaway
food
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 is that humans do not waste time
to prepare
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preparing
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food
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.
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, most
people
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order
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 the meal
for
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during
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 lunch breaks in
order
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 to gain time. If they want to prepare
meal
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a meal
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 for work, they have to wake up early. Another advantage of buying ready-made
food
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 is that
people
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 do not have to wash tableware and
to
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apply
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tidy up
kitchen
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the kitchen
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.
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, if individuals cook a meal at home, they should use cookware and wash
them
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it
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. For
this
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 tiring work, many
people
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 prefer to
order
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 from restaurants.
One
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On
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 the other hand, receiving pre-cooked
food
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 can be harmful in
order
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 to human health.
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, some fast foods are made from unhealthy
oil
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oils
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 as palm oil and
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this
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which
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 oil to get involved in
blood
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the blood
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 which it
causes
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causing
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 obesity or heart diseases.
Additionally
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, consuming ready
meal
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meals
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 can
be
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apply
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decrease physical movement. When
people
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 cook a
meal
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meal,
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 they have to move to wash or chop ingredients. Another disadvantage of ordering
food
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 is that
people
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 spend more money than buying ingredients.
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, when
people
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order
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a meal
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meal
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meal,
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 they should give
service
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a service
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 fee at restaurants or
delivering
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a delivery
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 fee for eating at home. In conclusion, eating
ready-meal have
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ready meals has
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 several benefits
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such
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, such
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 as
gain
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saving
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 time and not doing some domestic jobs;
however
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, it has some disadvantages as causing sickness or spending more money.
Overall
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, I believe the merits outweigh the disadvantages.

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language
Fix small grammar and word form to make ideas clear.
language
Use plain and direct words. Do not use long, hard phrases.
structure
Plan three main ideas for the body and give one clear example for each.
coherence
Use and place linking words well to show the flow of ideas.
content
The writer shows both sides of the issue.
content
There are some good reasons and examples.
structure
The end has a clear view.
Your opinion

Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.

If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.

Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

Here are examples of instructions that require you to give your opinion:

...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

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