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The table below gives information about rail transport in for countries in 2007. Summerise the information by selecting and reporting the main features abd make comparisons where relevant.

The table below gives information about rail transport in for countries in 2007. Summerise the information by selecting and reporting the main features abd make comparisons where relevant.
The table depicts the quantity of citizens travelling by train (except for metro),
that
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for
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passenger
kilometres
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 per person and
cargo
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the cargo
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 carried in Malaysia,
Canada
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,
China
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 and the UAE during 2007. On the whole, it is apparent that
China
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 were the one to take the lead,
while
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Canada
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owned
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had
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 the most modest numbers.
According to
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 the chart, there were nearly 30 million people using rail transport in
China
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, holding the highest level.
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, every resident in
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 country
traveled
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travelled
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 an average of 1980
kilometres
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, which ranked
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first.
However
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, the figure for cargo carried was not the top, with just 23 billion
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tons. Meanwhile, the number of people using
this
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 transport in
Canada
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 was 1% of that
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in
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China
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, standing at the lowest point.
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, the average passenger
kilometres
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 in
this
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 state was at the bottom
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, at
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 around 80
kilometres
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. Yet, it was
Canada
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 that had the most cargo carried, with over 28 billion
of
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tons. Regarding Malaysia and the UAE, these two countries shared similar
datas
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data
 in all three categories. Specifically, under 6 million
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dwellers in each region travelled by train.
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, over 750
was
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were
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 the passenger
kilometres
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 per head in both
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nations. Eventually, there were about 22 billion tons of goods that were carried by the mentioned transport in not only Malaysia but
also
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 the UAE.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words kilometres, canada, china with synonyms.
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