IELTS Writing Correction Service
Writing Samples
Band 3

Global warming is one of the serious issues being faced by people today. What are the causes of global warming and what measures must be taken by government and individuals in order to prevent global warming?

Nowadays we can observe that global warming is one of the most notable
concern
Fix the agreement mistake
concerns
show examples
 in the entire world.There are some reasons for it.
On the other
Linking Words
hand
Add a comma
hand,
show examples
 we can fix these problems with some solutions It
often
Verb problem
is often
show examples
 argued that
the
Correct article usage
apply
show examples
air pollution is a well-known issue about global warming.It affects lots of
individual
Fix the agreement mistake
individuals
show examples
.
Linking Words
Also
Add a comma
Also,
show examples
 it can end with health problems. Numerous people have been diagnosed with lots of different ways.But we can tackle
this
Linking Words
 problem by not using cars so
common
Replace the word
commonly
show examples
 in our daily life. Or using electric powered
veichles
Correct your spelling
vehicles
,bicycles and transportation
such
Linking Words
 as subway,train or bus. Smoking or vaping is a
noticable
Correct your spelling
noticeable
 cause of global warming.
Linking Words
Furthermore
Add a comma
Furthermore,
show examples
 it's the worst thing to use for
the
Correct article usage
apply
show examples
human health.It has drawbacks in multiple ways
on
Change preposition
for
show examples
 nature and human beings. We have to cause
the
Correct article usage
apply
show examples
humanity or establish related charities to influence the world
to not
Correct word order
not to
show examples
 walk on the wrong path.
Linking Words
Also
Add a comma
Also,
show examples
 we have to keep our natural places clean. Because it can cause lots of animal
death
Fix the agreement mistake
deaths
show examples
. Or a glass bottle can be a starting point for a wildfire.So we can't underestimate these
type
Fix the agreement mistake
types
show examples
 of situations. Governments
has
Correct subject-verb agreement
have
show examples
 to place more trash bins.
Troughmore
Correct your spelling
Through more
 they need to think about new projects to make their responsible establishments much safer. To sum it
up
Punctuation problem
up,
show examples
 we have the opportunity to have no concern in our
life
Punctuation problem
life,
show examples
 we have to be grateful for
this
Linking Words
 opportunity and just go for it.

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site's author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

structure
Plan your writing with a clear outline before you write the essay.
content
Stick to the topic. State clear causes and give clear steps for government and people.
grammar
Use simple grammar and fix mistakes that make the text hard to read.
coherence
Use linking words to link ideas and to show cause and effect.
content
The effort to discuss both causes and steps.
language
The writing uses simple words to share ideas.
content
Try to show how people and government can act.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »- a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

What to do next:
Look at other essays: