Some people think living in a big city is bad for people’s health. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

The world
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place today, especially when it comes to large cities. Living in
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may result in
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more health
issues for many people.
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I agree or disagree that living in a big city is bad for people's health. I completely agree that living in a large city has a serious effect on our health. First of
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the quality of air in large cities is definitely bad. It is usually saturated with high levels of carbon dioxide
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the large number of vesicles.
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People
living there are suffering from respiratory diseases like asthma.

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structure
Plan with a clear intro, body and ending. State your view in the intro.
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Each paragraph should have a clear topic sentence and one main idea.
content
Add more reasons and links to health, not just air quality.
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Give more specific examples of health issues from city life.
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Use simple words and check spelling. Words like vesicles and Peolpe are wrong.
grammar
Fix grammar: 'Living in such cities, may' should be 'Living in such cities may' and 'the world is a different place' should be spaced.
structure
Conclude by restating your view.
content
Clear position on the issue.
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Shows awareness of health topics in cities.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general
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