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The line graph shows visit to and from the UK from 1979 to 1999. The bar chart shows the most popular countries visited by UK resident in 1999.

The line graph shows visit to and from the UK from 1979 to 1999. The bar chart shows the most popular countries visited by UK resident in 1999.
The line graph depicts the number of
visiters
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visitors
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 from and to the
UK
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 between 1979 and
1999
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1999,
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while
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 the bar chart illustrates the 5 most visited regions by the
UK
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 population in 1999. On the whole, it is apparent that the
quantity
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number
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 of
people
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traveling
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travelling
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 to the
UK
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 witnessed a swift rise.
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, the figure for the
UK
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people
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 going overseas shared the same trend, in which France and Spain were the most to be favorited.
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 the line graph, in 1979, there were nearly 15
million
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people
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 coming to the
UK
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. After that,
this
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 category went up continuously, reaching over 50
million
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 visits in the
last
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 year
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apply
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. Meanwhile, the former
for
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of
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the
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apply
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UK
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travelers
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travellers
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 was about 10
million
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 in
late
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the late
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 1970s,
then
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tripling
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tripled
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 in 1999. In terms of the column, Turkey was the least visited among 5 countries, with just 2
millions
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million
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of
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apply
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the
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apply
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UK
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 visitors,
a
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half of that for both Greece and the USA. In the
mean time
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meantime
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, the highest ranking belonged to Spain and France
with
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, with
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 around 10
million
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people
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 coming from the
UK
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, in which France's data was a bit higher.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words uk, people, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • upward trend
  • downward trend
  • fluctuate/fluctuations
  • significant increase/decrease
  • reach a peak
  • hit a low
  • steady rise
  • sharp decline
  • popular destination
  • economic conditions
  • travel regulations
  • cultural factors
  • tourism
  • international travel
  • visitor numbers
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