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The diagram below shows the various stages required to produce coffee products from coffee beans

The diagram below shows the various stages required to produce coffee products from coffee beans
The diagram
illustrate
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illustrates
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different
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the different
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 types necessary to production
coffee
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 for
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coffee
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producing coffee
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beans
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Overall
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, the
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process consisted
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consisted
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consists
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8
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of 8
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main stages
process
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 begin
at
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with
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 collecting raw materials and
ending
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end
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 with making ready-made
coffee
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products
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 from the supplied final product
and
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, and
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 clearly demonstrates how raw inputs are gradually processed into a usable
from thought
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form through
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 a sequence of systematic steps . Evidently, the
process
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 carried out with the participant of a person and thanks
for
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to
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techniques
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the techniques
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 At the initial stage, the
process
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 extracted from the harvesting
beans
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 once per year, good grain from good wood. Once the
beans
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are collected
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collected
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collected,
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 it is transferred onto
processing
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the processing
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 machine , which
help
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helps
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for
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with
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 cleaning. After have to drying
around
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for around
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 24-72 hours, and
coffee
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beans
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been
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are
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 dry
than initial
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enough
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 state need to
hulling
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be hulling
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. Following the hulling
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process
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process,
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 the
beans
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 moved to
roasting
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the roasting
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process
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,
while
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firing
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the firing
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process
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 hardens and strengthens the material, it must be closely monitored to prevent
over burning
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over-burning
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. When roasting is complete, the final
products
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 are sorted for plastic and plastic bags before being packaged for transportation .The finished
products
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 are distributed to construction sites, and
purchase
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the purchase
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 of
coffee
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products
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 ,
independenting
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independent
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of
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each stage
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,
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completed
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completes
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 the entire manufacturing cycle

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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words coffee, beans, process, products with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • grow (v)
  • harvest (v)
  • pick (v)
  • cherry (n)
  • bean (n)
  • wash (v)
  • dry (v)
  • sun (n)
  • remove (v)
  • skin (n)
  • hull (n)
  • process (n/v)
  • sort (v)
  • size (n)
  • weight (n)
  • roast (v)
  • roasted (adj)
  • cool (v)
  • grind (v)
  • ground (adj)
  • pack (v)
  • packaging (n)
  • bag (n)
  • seal (v)
  • label (v)
  • store (v)
  • store (n)
  • ship (v)
  • sell (v)
  • quality (n)
  • taste (n/v)
  • aroma (n)
  • product (n)
  • stage (n)
  • process (n)
  • method (n)
  • final (adj)
  • date (n)
  • brand (n)
  • export (v)
  • market (n/v)
  • time (n)
  • trend (n)
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