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Band 4.5

Some people believe that professionals, such as doctors and engineers, should be required to work in the country where they did their training. Others believe they should be free to work in another country if they wish. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

The debate around whether
professionals
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 are limited to
work
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 in the
country
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 where they receive their training continues to spark diverse viewpoints, with proponents and opponents firmly voicing their perspectives.
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 some advocate that
professionals
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 ought to work in the
country
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 in which they did their training, others believe that there is no necessary to restrict the
country
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 where
professionals
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 seek
jobs
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. After careful evaluation, I find myself aligned with the latter viewpoint. My stance is primarily based on the logical consistency and strong empirical support for
this
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 perspective, especially regarding the fact that seeking
jobs
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 in another
country
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 does not mean they forget their home
country
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.
This
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 belief is grounded in the fact that though
professionals
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 work in another
country
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, most of them are still committed to homeland contribution, which substantial research and data
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 validate.
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, studies examining
that
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the
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 regular donation of money and stuff by a considerable
of
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number of
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 doctors and engineers to their hometown consistently support
this
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 view, adding to its credibility.
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, it is undeniable that personal freedom matters, providing another persuasive reason for my stance based on the premise that
professionals
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 have the
rights
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right
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 to pursue better quality of life conditions.
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, the opposing argument suggests that
professionals
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 are constrained to seek
jobs
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 in the
country
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 where they received training, relying on the notion that
government
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the government
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 has spent plenty of money in providing
best
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the best
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subsidiaries
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subsidies
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 for
professionals
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.
However
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, upon closer inspection,
this
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 reasoning weakens because
rather
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 than forcing or persuading doctors and engineers to remain in the
country
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, trying to construct an attractive environment to draw more elites might be a long-term and useful choice.
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that
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 whatever,
professionals
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 will leave the
country
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 one day if the existing
country
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 can no longer
providing
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 excellent resources.
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, recent government data indicate that
there
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apply
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are
increasingly
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professionals
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 have migrated
in
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to
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 other countries all over the world, casting doubt on the long-term viability of
this
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 position. In summary, after weighing both perspectives, I remain confident that there is no necessary to restrict the
country
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 where
professionals
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 seek
jobs
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.

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language
Use clear grammar and short, simple sentences to avoid mistakes.
content
Give more clear and exact examples or data to back up ideas.
structure
Connect ideas with easy links and topic sentences so the flow is smooth.
content
The essay tries to cover both views and shows a clear personal stance.
structure
Good use of signpost words like 'Conversely' and 'In summary'.
Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • professionals
  • doctors
  • engineers
  • required
  • training
  • home country
  • cultural
  • linguistic
  • advantages
  • economic impact
  • free
  • another country
  • globalization
  • international collaboration
  • improving
  • skills
  • knowledge
  • experience
  • opinion
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